Slip Away

A collage poem, from October, 2016.

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Slip Away

Give me that evening
And the white brightness of the
Twice scrubbed moon
ascending. With the night
that seemed so black
hurrying off alone.

10/3/16

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2 thoughts on “Slip Away

  1. Superb! I am especially struck by and taken with the image of the “twice scrubbed moon”. That is a wonderfully strong metaphor. I also like that there is a bit of a collage ellipsis in the first line as if there is a mystery or secret, a missing adjective that would explain the type of evening which has been removed for reasons of privacy perhaps.

    • Thank you, I also like that about the moon, as I imagined giving it a good cleaning and then it feels so shiny new, no matter what situation it is dragged into. I like that idea of it having a newness to it, for the overall sense of the poem and also because sometimes there is a new moon! As for the ellipsis, the original word fell off, I liked it better without it, and did not replace it, and also, I liked the look of what it left behind – a little gap that you wonder why it’s there. Serendipity teaching me again. Normally I would have wanted to neaten things up, but this little mishap showed me another way to see things.

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